"Dominion of Darkness” is a strategy/RPG text game in which the player takes on the role of a Sauron-style Lord of Darkness with the goal of conquering the world. He will carry out his plans by making various decisions. He will build his army and send it into battles, weave intrigues and deceptions, create secret spy networks and sectarian cults, recruit agents and commanders, corrupt representatives of Free Peoples and sow discord among them, collect magical artifacts and perform sinister plots. Note – one game takes about 1 hour, but the premise is that the game can be approached several times, each time making different decisions, getting different results and discovering something new. Feedback is very much welcome. Very, very much. Although game is playable and winnable now, I am still working on improving it, so all suggestions are appreciated.

Here is the game: https://adeptus7.itch.io/dominion

And here are reviews:

PS. If You like my writing and tales with villain protagonists, You can also read my not-so-short dark fantasy/horror story: https://adeptusrpg.wordpress.com/2022/12/14/tale-of-the-necromancer/ or listen to its audio version: https://adeptusrpg.wordpress.com/2022/12/14/tale-of-the-necromancer/

  • Elevator7009@kbin.run
    21·
    1 year ago

    You made a typo: “Altough” instead of “Although”. You’re also missing a space after the period in “plots.Note”.

    “You” should not be capitalized unless it is the first word in the sentence. You have it capitalized inappropriately in several places on the itch.io page. Your typos and your consistent English mistake with “you” makes me think there might be other English errors in the game. This is a text-based game, where I will spend most of my time reading. I don’t want to spend my time reading things that have lots of English errors. And I don’t think I’m the only potential player who decides not to play because of your English mistakes. I didn’t comb through your post specifically looking for errors to pick on, I honestly just noticed them without trying to and found them distracting and annoying. I’m human, I make mistakes and typos too, but I’m also not promoting a game whose gameplay involves lots of reading.

    I don’t want to be mean, but you did ask for feedback so I feel it’s appropriate to share this. I do love the concept of playing as a villain protagonist, it’s what made me click on your post in the first place.

    • Adeptus@lemy.lolOPEnglish
      1·
      1 year ago

      Sorry, I just saw Your comment! Thank you very much. In my language there is a custom, that when writing, you capitalize "You", but I see that many English speakers treat it as an error, so I will change it.

      • Elevator7009@kbin.run
        1·
        1 year ago

        Yeah, it’s probably correct in your language. Just want to clarify that in English we don’t just treat it as an error, it’s flat-out wrong to do that in English.

        Similarly, we also do not capitalize “Your” unless it is the first word in a sentence.